Will she whisper to the winter...

[KingBlueTwista]

Will she whisper to the winter,
Will she embrace her shadow self?
In pain she clips the splinters,
In vain I wish I could help.
In her I search for traces
Of warmth and distant places.
Instead I'm met with empty eyes,
A shallow form and fading cries.
I will avenge the loss she feels
Entwined within the coldest steel.
She peels her outer shell away,
Infected by darkness, words fail to convey.
Demons tore her into pieces,
Stray fragments on the gale.
Worn upon this winding road,
No shelter from the hail.

 

[Ligaturd]

Amazing stuff, I don't know what else to say. The imagery was very powerful.

 

[thujone]

true; this was great, i loved it!

my only complaint is the "infected by darkness, words fail to convey" line sounds weak

 

[BearLeeLive]

wow thats exactly how i feel about this friend..
great work keep it comeing!!!

 

[KingBlueTwista]

Thanks guys, I appreciate it

Thujone; I know it's kind of lame but I wrote and post it in a hurry so I didn't really scrutinise it! Maybe I'll change it if I get inspired.

 

[HighlyEnjoyed]

i'd like to put that to music lol, have to be fast punk style sorry if you'd disagree, but brilliant none the less