w a i t i n g

[mariacallas]

waiting

absence breeds tabs of yearning
melodies previously unheard of ; engines
purring softly in stalled racecars, metals
tinkling to a tune the senses usually choose
to ignore, shoes stomping hastily as absent
eyes follow in footsteps , leaving
carpet marks in the darkness , pencils
etched furtively on blank pieces of canvas
one last time catching rainbows ; then
the swoop , colors dropping like fantastic
winged missiles exploding silently
with the first few pinches of rain
as you blaze into the drabness of this waiting
i might still be dreaming, i think
No, you are here, neon pink pen of
fantasies in my palm now hushed
closed, pointless, perfect
running in the sea-spray
i feel your breath again
escaping into your eyes
fire under my fingernails

 

[Negative]

Thaddeus

 

[Stasis]

Amazing.

 

[Frustrated]

Sexual desire and its happening for you

 

[sunshinesunderground]

interesting imagery

 

[mariacallas]

...i think i wrote this from an artists point of view...sort of like the waiting in between moments of inspiration.

 

[banksy]

is it possible to wait between inspiration or do we dangle aimlessly awaiting hope to awaken our colour blinded eyes. great prose cc

 

[RareForm]

wow twix, i think this is the best thing i've read of yours. i feel this has possessed me.

 

[mealltach]

colors dropping like fantastic
winged missiles exploding silently
with the first few pinches of rain
as you blaze into the drabness of this waiting

That's wooonderful. I enjoyed this.

Also, like I said to spinkle in one of his threads, it's nice to see someone who knows that a line break doesn't have to be final. You give this a real stream of consciousness kind of feel that I like a lot.

 

[Noodle]

*bump*

 

[fatallyflawed]

good un!

 

[up all night]

Absolutely charming.

 

[Dtergent]

I likes it a lot Libog sa inspirasyon

 

[sunflash876]

dig it
lots and lots