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(not a) love song

Raz

Raz

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this is not a love song
it doesn't even rhyme
anyway
i find it difficult to believe in the concept of
romantic love

romantic love
is the name that people give to crushes
head-over-heels infatuation
intense obsession
it's not at all evolved

romantic love
is what leads to
co-dependence
the wasting away of
Me and You
the withering of
Personal Self
that i hold so dear

but i digress
and i rant
when all i wanted to say was
this is not a love song
but i like you very much
and you make me like me
and today
that feels enough.

<3
 
I learned a long time ago that knowing a love is there, is enough.
If you wait and obsess about hearing it out loud, you run the risk of losing it.
There is a certain wonderfulness about the words that go unsaid....
"the wasting away of Me and You"... i have been there.
 
Hey Raz, these days when you write poetry are you pretty much imagining a spoken word gig when you write? Cos once again, I can imagine you on the mic, and this working a treat with the crowd. :)

Also, I love the 'anyway'... I can really hear how that would work too. It makes the whole thing sound more off-the-cuff and natural.
 
^^Not really consciously, but I think stuff writes itself like that now generally anyway.. :)

When I originally wrote it I wasn't sure if I wanted 'anyway' to be the end of the second line or the beginning of the third, so I kind of made it a joiner of both of them..
 
Experience tells me that this happens exactly like this...the balance is so hard to find when swept away.
 
Raz said:
when all i wanted to say was
this is not a love song
but i like you very much
and you make me like me
and today
that feels enough.
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Beautiful. This resonated with me. Love can make everything else insignificant -and silence all of our self criticisms. It's a nice place to be in. :)
 
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