your battle

[up all night]

Like on an anonymous voyage
Of self discovery,
I struggle to find
The battle lines you've drawn.
Wordlessly possessive,
You keep me at a distance
Till i turn away.
Scathingly aloof,
I love the man
Who won't look in my eyes.
Heartfelt emotions
Intertwine with
Societal expectation
To create a concoction
Of doubtful benefit
To the melting heart.
Your love is
An enemy to your ego.
Both fighting for
Pride of place
In the wondrous workings
Of our relationship.
But the winner is preordained.
Your destiny to lose the battle.
And mine to cradle a loser.

 

[E-girl]

you're not alone.
your ending is FANTABULOUS**, btw.! hope to read more of your work here in this forum!
** fantabulous, adj. simply put, you rock.

 

[up all night]

thanks hun.
you're too beautiful for your own good.

 

[Sara Tonin]

Very nice flow and feeling in this. I like it

 

[harraser]

nice nice nice nice nice
suffice to say I liked it a lot

 

[Cowgirl24]

I meant to reply to this when it was on page one but never got around to it so I've searched high and low for it coz I couldn't remember the title. So, anyway, found it...really really enjoyed this piece. Those last two lines really struck a chord with me. Perfect. *BUMP*

 

[up all night]

thank you...i'm glad you liked it