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you open me like

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vurtomatic

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you open me like
fingers clasped in prayer
you come into me
unfold my fist petal by
delicate petal touched
by spring

i do not know how you unfold
my fingers are yours as you
open yourself revealed i see
my self

you open me like
a lamp in darkness
you come into me
stealing softly you light
my chamber of echo

i do not know how you light
my room you move into slowly
box by box, bit by bit
you unpack and fill my empty
with your light

you open me like
a lock i had but never knew
you come into me
unlocking me like a piercing
key to a me i
never lived

i do not know how you unlock
i do not know how you light
i do not know how you unfold

my locked room of falling petals

but

thank you

::

this is to someone who reminded me, within one conversation, that to live, i have to embrace both the joys, and the hurts of life.

probably the most illuminating conversation i've had recently
 
vurtomatic said:
you open me like
fingers clasped in prayer
you come into me
unfold my fist petal by
delicate petal touched
by spring

i do not know how you unfold
my fingers are yours as you
open yourself revealed i see
my self

you open me like
a lamp in darkness
you come into me
stealing softly you light
my chamber of echo

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isnt it funny hun how it only needs to take one person to bring us back to life. to make us realise things we didnt know or need to know. i loved this peice hun. it was well written and gave me a warm fuzzy feeling cause i was having a similar convo the other day with someone very much like this. :)
 
Beautiful Vurt.

Very reminiscent of E.E. Cummings' poem "Somewhere I have never travelled", but then again, you already know that :)

Delicate, gentle and a sense of wonder.

Smiley:)
 
This makes me smile. I'm so happy to see other people finding happiness and joy in things as simple (or complex) as a conversation. Good stuf vurt. :)

CM
 
smileyfish said:
Beautiful Vurt.

Very reminiscent of E.E. Cummings' poem "Somewhere I have never travelled", but then again, you already know that :)

Delicate, gentle and a sense of wonder.

Smiley:)
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yup, definitely influenced by that piece cos i just read it recently... i fail to do the master justice, but i try ;)=D

those of you interested, please check out the original, u wont regret it. e.e. cummings - somewhere i have never travelled, gladly beyond

i wrote it as a thank you but i dunno if i'll ever show it to the person :\
 
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Cheers Plaz!!

Cummings is by far my fav. writer and u did the piece justice....I felt the same deep breathe feeling reading ur piece as I feel everytime reading cummings.

nice work!!

~B
 
oh my....that is horrible of me..... :(

Cheers vurtomatic!!!!

Sometimes my mind refuses to work!!

~B
 
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