Yet you lied

[Pantomime7]

My open wounds reek of blood
The stench overwhelms my senses
As I peer into the mirror of former reality
And watch it shatter within my gaze.
The sting of betrayel still lingers here
And, juxtaposed to Hades and Omega
I ponder the indiffence of you heart
Not knowing wether you think me or not.
And the fog, none clearer, none clearer.
I loved as the dying child
And you took me for my gain
Spreading me for the world,
Humiliating my pride
Humiliating, to ones I love.....
And now I know
And only now I understand
The motive of your mind
Loving, open, loyal,
Was your objective to find,
Was your objective kill
And as I peer into this mirror
Thoughts bleed into my brain........
You promised you loved
Yet you lied
You promised you cared
Yet you lied
You promised you were mine........
And as you lied
Tears of red bled upon my cheek.

 

[froggygirl]

As I peer into the mirror of former reality
And watch it shatter within my gaze.

I liked those lines a lot...

 

[CHiLD-0F-THE-BEAT]

Originally posted by Pantomime7
My open wounds reek of blood
The stench overwhelms my senses
As I peer into the mirror of former reality
And watch it shatter within my gaze.
The sting of betrayel still lingers here
And, juxtaposed to Hades and Omega
I ponder the indiffence of you heart
Not knowing wether you think me or not.
And the fog, none clearer, none clearer.

^IMO, the strength of this piece lies in these lines.
Very nice. Powerful and strong words. Well positioned.

 

[Prolapstriumph]

Great stuff man I read it over a few times, i think anyone who's been seriously betrayed by a lover (assuming that's the point lol) can relate to your words.

 

[Altered_Soul9]

And, juxtaposed to Hades and Omega

I love this line. This is an amazing write and I know your struggles all 2 well. Very Nice

 

[Pantomime7]

To Altered_Soul 9..................
Thanks for all the support you've given me lately: I really appreciate it........ Hey and don't work yourself to death if you know what I mean.

 

[cherub]

alot of raw emotions and truth in this piece definately a great piece !

 

[faceless_shadow]

I loved as the dying child
And you took me for my gain
Spreading me for the world,
Humiliating my pride
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very touching.....everything flowed so smoothly...great great great

 

[neverwas]

this was good work. i liked it because it made me think of things

 

[TiberCross]

^ditto. i just agree with precisely what you said. and i think it says it nicely considering i don't want to go into the details of those "things"