would you please

[beanpoophead]

Naked
breathless
dirty
so fucking dirty

threw it all
away
just for
one day

tears roll
and she
knows its not
okay

tried too
sleep
eyes can’t close
without you

tripped down
fell down
a million times
times two again

there you
are
hold my
hand

make it
seem ok
would you
please?

 

[RareForm]

nice write.

 

[Raz]

Reading that made me want to give you a hug. This is another one of those pieces that I think would work really well as a song..

 

[cherub]

Lately your heart is so much in anything you write. How can not one feel for you when you write so completely raw with your feeling.

* BIG HUGS*

 

[katmeow]

Good stuff

I agree with Raz - would be great as a song.