Why.

[AlphaCharlieID]

First off, i suck a poems, and writing stuff, thought i might give it a go, not the best to start off with, but it's how i feel at the moment. (stupid i know, sorry)

Why does it hurt when he talks to me?
Why does it feel like he doesnt care?
Why cant he unserstand i need him?
Why doesnt he see the pain he is causing?
Does he not love us anymore?
Does he care more for her?
What must we do i earn him back,
To regain the love we had years ago?
How could he treat us like this? We are blood, She, is not.
I think i hate you, for what you are doing, for what you have done.

I hate you dad.

 

[RareForm]

yes. i have had the same thoughts. i barely know my dad because of similar reasons. the feeling of the experience is indescribable.

 

[cherub]

years and years I felt the same way,,, so definately a relatable poem,, maybe for more then you think... So you don't suck at poems,, you made it very real.

Great work !

 

[DeirdreScott]

Wow... WE all really connect on this level, don't we... What a sad thought that modern society can relate to the idea of the absent and despised father....
This poem really is quite strong...

 

[AlphaCharlieID]

Thanks guys, You actually helped make me feel better.

Was in a strange mood when that happened... doesnt help..

maybe i will start posting happy ones now :D

 

[RareForm]

^i'd certainly welcome that

 

[bean_head]

Wow that kinda knocked me back ... and killled my buzz for a few secs.

I can feel the emotion and passion but then I might just be really high ... actaully both ... YAY! %) I really liked that fuckoin' good effort.

 

[AlphaCharlieID]

sorry for the buzz killing.....

 

[bean_head]

sorry for the buzz killing.....

LOL no worries it's great to read real words from the heart even if it kills the fun for a moment. That really moved me

 

[bean_head]

So few words ... yet !!

I just read this again and got a chill running up my spine .. .

 

[AlphaCharlieID]

Thanks guys...