where i was before, where i'll be once more

[RareForm]

moving through the trees
the wicked wind bends around
and through the vent
splashing on my face
it's a race to where i was before
to where i'll be once more
the rusty wreckage moves
moves through me and spews me
back to where i was before
to where i'll be once more
i'm catapulted in the reach
of steel to a pole with no lights
in the pull of exertion
i see no fear in severe heights
emerge dense to where i was before
to where i'll be once more
the blood
in my veins
thickens
with each
respawning,
unfaltering,
without a worry--
my smile has
not changed
the rain
still feels the same
and the taste
of cancer scares
me insane
still, the stranger's stare
kindles an advantage
deception marks a relation
placed a wand right through me
i bleed
they watch me bleed
and i see them weep
but i can still feel everything
but i can never go to sleep
so here i am where i was before
where i'll be once more

 

[DeirdreScott]

Wow... Rare. This is awesome....
"So here I am where I was before
where I'll be once more"
I like these lines... nice flow.
Very depressing subject, though. I want to know all about it...

 

[Free Radical]

"respawning"

oh my

did u get that word from playing first-person shooters or what?

if so...

cool %)

 

[milkncereal2]

nice shit, have you thought about just gettingw/ of all the and's. it seems to make it a lil choppy especially w/ the 3 ines starting w/ end at the bottom of the paper

 

[RareForm]

DS- thanks, surely, anytime.

FR- not directly lol, but it was somewhere there in mind. :D

mnc- hey nice suggestion. i did very little revising to this. cool. gracias.

 

[cherub]

sorry for the delay,,, i was seriously sick for a bit... grr

anyhow

darkness of this poem,, kinda fits you but yet it is not you... a very confused you i might say... but it is done with such added skill you have with your poetry