We are never as dignified as we are in death.

[ganja god]

Knees buckle, yet never stood as tall
Ego erodes, solid withal.

Solemn contract of mortal coil
Due payed of listless toil.

Estimably topples the stone ghost
Soaring soul leaves earthly post.

Dissipate the hungry palate
whose desire never sate.

Pure
One
Whole.

 

[winston red]

Kind of sounds like the lyrics of a grindcore piece...
But the childish two verse and simple rimes bring it down.

 

[ganja god]

thats not how you spell rhyme. And what about two line stanzas and rhyming is childish exactly?

 

[swilow]

It sounds great, rimes D) well and flows in a sort of incantation lke way. Very good.