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[Negative]

mushroom clouded
gray matter
struggles to the surface
almost unrecognizable
almost . . .
gasp for oxygen
thoughts fight to the zenith
begging for the light of day
avoiding
mental beatdown
skirting the perils of the system
crossing long since burned
neurotic bridges
trying desperately to reach
the axis of power
cerebral intentions
muddled actions
the sloth of a million wasted days
against the hardship of the only way

 

[cherub]

you did a good job with one,, the flow is nice and it is like relatable in alot of ways i am sure with alot of peopole ,,, we all are just trying to just get by.

good piece of work !

 

[potato]

mushroom clouded
the sloth of a million wasted days
against the hardship of the only way

Awesome.

 

[Manne]

Awesome work. It's even slightly reminiscent of Nine Inch Nails' The Downward Spiral. Your work writing, here, has a cloudy feel that I try to put into almost all of my poems/work. It makes it real, with confusion and wonder and hate and love all mixed up like we are daily. Keep it up.

 

[mariacallas]

I love it babe!!!

 

[RareForm]

read this the other day, perfect.

 

[mariacallas]

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