Three Graves **Please Critique**

[a100unitSHOT]

I was never given the chance to say, "Goodbye."
Now you're gone and I'll never know why
Your sister found you when she heard you fall
A gun in your hand and a bullet in the wall

Where did you go?
I wanted to follow!

You had it all, but you said, "Goodbye."
Chasing that dragon as high as it would fly
But you didn't know it would take your last breath
Your eyes drained of life, and filled with death

We were best friends in those days
Now you're all in three graves
Why was it you who fell,
When we were already in hell?

Four years had passed and I thought it would end
I didn't think I could lose another best friend
But I had forgotten you had a bad heart
Your dad found you dead in your back yard

How could you go,
And not let me follow?!

We were best friends in those days
Now you're all in three graves
Why was it you who fell,
When we were already in...

When we were already in hell!

 

[opium]

Deep. i like it a lot.

 

[a100unitSHOT]

^Thanks much! It's meant to be (and is) a song, so that's why the "We were best friends..." block doesn't fit in with the rest because it's in 3/4 while the rest is in 4/4. Anyway, thanks again.