three cheers for suicide

[todeskampf]

i wrote this quite a while ago.. i'm not sure if anyone will like it or not, but here goes nothing. let me know what you think.
"three cheers for suicide"
hello
super jet-pilot boy
can you take me back to
birthday party land?
(i don't mean to disturb you
but i think you'd better
fly me friendly -- fly me sober)
wake up, sleepyhead
and take us home
hold my hand and tell me lies
like 'almost there'
(i don't mean to alarm you
but the ground
is rushing up to greet us)
and stirring
from his
beauty
sleep --
this is your
captain speaking
i've had a few too many drinks
and now it seems that
we're all headed down
fasten seat-belts
and brace yourselves
mind the no-smoking policy
lest the cancer takes you
before we ever crash and burn
three cheers for suicide
oh
there goes saturday night
it's better to have never ever
fallen at all
than to have fallen for you
(and just so you know)
as we slipped from the cloud
sipping rainwater droplets
i thought i tasted a piece of you
(and just so you know)
it would have made me cry
if only i wasn't too busy
laughing
my
fucking
head
off
three cheers for suicide
oh
there goes saturday night
it's better to have never ever
fallen at all
than to have fallen for you
[ 26 February 2003: Message edited by: todeskampf ]

 

[katmeow]

I like the way you write

 

[harraser]

this is really really damn good!!!! id love to hear the music for it.

 

[rewiiired]

I really like this. Is there music? It does sound as if it should be a song...

 

[todeskampf]

thank you. =)
the song isn't finished yet, because i'm still in the middle of recording the vocals.
in the meantime, i've got a couple of other songs up at http://www.mp3.com/m_r
(i have about a billion songs finished, but mp3.com will only host 3 at a time.. sucks)
thanks again!