The Reincarnation Of Elijah

[RareForm]

brother brother i have sinned
saw the color of a good man's skin
i walked a mile to cleanse my hands
but the revenant crossed me with his plans

hanging from a willow tree
will i die or will i bleed?
the smoke around is burning red
the noose fit tight around my neck

the more i pray the sky come down
my feet get further from the ground
the voices in my head grow weak
and the dybbuk stretches in my feet

once a denizen of hell
but i came back to tell my tale
why the wanderers picked on me
and left me dangling from a tree

tightly fitted in my skin
here to trot the earth again
and wherever it is i may go
every mile i'll count to losing sin

 

[Sexy.Sadie]

Ooooh. . very nice, darling.

Love you.

 

[drug_wench]

powerful....and clever!

 

[yakksoho]

You are outdoing yourself and I love it.

 

[cherub]

Nice flow to this, the struggles we go through life and it seems a rebirth of sorts with this piece.. nice

 

[(Wordy)]

I like this. There's some real sophistication in your phrasing and imagery. And the rhymes work very well - very rhythmic.

 

[Raz]

That was very cool...had a nice bluesy/hillbilly campfire feel to it..

 

[Mehm]

vivid

 

[up all night]

You are outdoing yourself and I love it.

I agree. I don't reply to your posts very often but I always read them because they are nearly always very clever. I hope you never stop posting.