The Last Time

[Dastrix Slogan]

Ok, I never wrote this. It was written by another author on another board I belong to - I thought this was particularly well written so I thought I'd share.

(Reproduced with permission)

-------------------------------------------

The Last Time
By: Lollo

And then
I gathered you up
cradled you in mortal arms
for the last time

Out
into the scalding sun
to where your grave awaits
Gaping black
the skies bright blue above

I laid you down
gently
in that hole
Covered you in
searing hot sand

And when I had
done
Walked away
incomplete

---------------------
So sad

 

[Chaotic Action Man]

that is very sad. there is beauty in the words though.

 

[katmeow]

And when I had
done
Walked away
incomplete

that is perfect!

 

[Dastrix Slogan]

^^it just is, isn't it!

 

[-|Twiztd|-]

that's a great poem...

 

[Raz]

Maybe I'm alone in this...but I don't think it's sad so much as a really beautiful tribute...

 

[E-girl]

didnt the author want you to show his/her name? if so, please include it.

very nice, btw.

 

[neverwas]

this was touching...brouight back a certian memory which i had nearlly forgotten

 

[Dastrix Slogan]

didnt the author want you to show his/her name? if so, please include it.

very nice, btw.

She goes under the alias of "Lollo" - check your pm

 

[cherub]

yes it is sad but a bitter sweetness in the end it seems,
it may not seem complete in my eyes i am sure that writting was more completing then the act. awesome thanks for sharing with us