The horse.....it's dead.

[ShamaLamaDingDong]

Just hit her. Hit her hard. Hit her about the head. Hit her with fact that you like her. Hit her with the fact thats she's gorgeous. Just hit her. Hit her again. Hit her some more. Hit her till she knows. Hit her till it hurts. Hit till you cant hit no more. Then, just hit her. Always Looping. Never Ending.

She likes it. You flatter. You compliment. You call her a queen. She loves it. She sucks it up. Sucks you dry. Your not getting anything in return.

Well, your getting something. Your getting embarassed. Your gaining a studder. That empty feeling in your stomach. The one you got cause she knows about your crush. The one that makes you want to run to the bathroom.

Your getting loaded questions. Your answers are what she wants. More compliments. More allusions to you liking her. It's a circle. Life Death. Death Life. Lust Embarassment. Embarassment Lust. Never ending. Always looping.

She's everything you ever wanted. She's everything you'll never have. Shut up and take it. Then start hitting her again. Always Looping. Never ending

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[onetwothreefour]

this is FANTASTIC.

it's disjointed but expressive, thoughtful but heartfelt.

the opening paragraph is great, and sets the tone really well. nice use of repetition of the "always looping"/"never ending" thing too.

i really like this part:

Originally posted by ShamaLamaDingDong
Your answers are what she wants. More compliments. More allusions to you liking her. It's a circle. Life Death. Death Life. Lust Embarassment. Embarassment Lust. Never ending. Always looping.

She's everything you ever wanted. She's everything you'll never have. Shut up and take it. Then start hitting her again. Always Looping. Never ending

 

[ShamaLamaDingDong]

it may or may not be noticable. i think Chuck Palahniuk was my english teacher.