The eyes of the Hymn.

[Altered_Soul9]

Here's another poem from me and John who is now on BL under the handle Pantomime7..so check his stuff out. I wrote lines 1, 3, 5, 7, 9, 11, 13, 15, 17, 19, 21, 23. He wrote lines 2, 4, 6, 8, 10, 12, 14, 16, 18, 20, 22.
I hope ya'll aint getting tired of these collaboration, because I really liked this.

~The light shines through my eyes.
Into the death of a lost soul.
~The image of a revelation can be seen.
I encompass your pain and I am broken.
~The pain floods my memories of heaven.
Floods my memories of a lost savior.
~I pray my empty prayer in hope of redemption.
Realization drowns me as I see the light fade.
~I feel the breeze from the devil's breathe
Fall as a tear from my withered eye.
~The wet secretion blends into my skin.
I feel the poison eviscerate my tired being.
~As a satirical voice mumbles a stolen hymn.
Detrimental piety streams from the dark.
~And once again my arms are paralyzed from the fear.
The flickering candle of the mind burns low.
~The waning moonlight bleeds with the shadows.
While days percolate towards night.
~I protrude through this illusion and become whole.
Leaving my unfeeling corpse within the grip of ephemeral detest.
~I turn my attention to the burning eyes.
As a smile of contempt moves across your face.
~The eyes of the Hymn engulfs my soul.

 

[RareForm]

Here's another poem from me and John who is now on BL under the handle Pantomime7..so check his stuff out. I wrote lines 1, 3, 5, 7, 9, 11, 13, 15, 17, 19, 21, 23. He wrote lines 2, 4, 6, 8, 10, 12, 14, 16, 18, 20, 22.
I hope ya'll aint getting tired of these collaboration, because I really liked this.

~The light shines through my eyes.
Into the death of a lost soul.
~The image of a revelation can be seen.
I encompass your pain and I am broken.
~The pain floods my memories of heaven.
Floods my memories of a lost savior.
~I pray my empty prayer in hope of redemption.
Realization drowns me as I see the light fade.
~I feel the breeze from the devil's breathe
Fall as a tear from my withered eye.
~The wet secretion blends into my skin.
I feel the poison eviscerate my tired being.
~As a satirical voice mumbles a stolen hymn.
Detrimental piety streams from the dark.
~And once again my arms are paralyzed from the fear.
The flickering candle of the mind burns low.
~The waning moonlight bleeds with the shadows.
While days percolate towards night.
~I protrude through this illusion and become whole.
Leaving my unfeeling corpse within the grip of ephemeral detest.
~I turn my attention to the burning eyes.
As a smile of contempt moves across your face.
~The eyes of the Hymn engulfs my soul.

wonderful imagery...great poem.

 

[faceless_shadow]

^i agree....they just keep getting better and better. Good detail

 

[Pantomime7]

The more we write the better our shit is.

 

[Painless Hurt]

Wow...you two guys wrte really well. This is the first poem I have read since I joined and I believe it will stick with me. It places a very vivid picture in my head and I dont believe I can let go. I love it!