The Blue Moon

[Altered_Soul9]

The blue moon fades under your deep brown eyes
My fevered infatuation for your lips exceeds my existence\
The lustful desires over the perfect imperfections within you
This love controls my appendages
And begs for the attention it deserves
This love bleeds and fills every orifice on this feeble temple
And yet through the months
which feel like years.....
And yet through the months I wait
Comfort engulfs my vocal cords as my heart spills all
My words lose themself in the endless pit that is your eyes
The fall down into your heart
There they spawn and flourish, filling your eyes with loving dissonance
The muscles within my face twinge
A tear wets the rough skin of my cheek
The lustful desires die down as you lay upon me
sleep consumes you
And yet you see
Through the window of my heart
The blue moon fading under your deep brown eyes
The blue moon fading under your deep brown eyes
The blue moon fading beneath the wait of our love.....

You told me of your love as eternity built our path....

 

[RareForm]

wow, i'm amazed at how well this was written....wonderful....definitely a fave of yours...

like the different approach as well....

nice one!

 

[froggygirl]

Comfort engulfs my vocal cords as my heart spills all
My words lose themself in the endless pit that is your eyes
The fall down into your heart
There they spawn and flourish, filling your eyes with loving dissonance



The blue moon fading under your deep brown eyes
The blue moon fading beneath the wait of our love.....

You told me of your love as eternity built our path....

I really liked those lines... They almost relaxed me and took me into them.. I like the very last line too.. very nice

 

[cherub]

yes a nice approach and very smooth in your wording, flows smooothly definately two thumps up

 

[neverwas]

lovely