Tell me this....

[mariacallas]

Dont speak
Of concrete and steel mansions
Beaches on azure blue oceans
Sugar coated gumdrops
Glittering on carnival walks
Oh so colorful fiestas in
Faraway lands, of faces
I shall never see...
Tell me instead...
That you know the color of my eyes
Sense the tears beneath my laughter
And the happiness within my voice
The truth behind my smiles
My meaning in small gestures
Tell me all the little things...
That make you, who you are
And I shall listen....
I shall hear every word
Your heart is telling mine

~~~

 

[raverchik]

Babe.. your writing is awesome! I love it

 

[shal]

I love it.

It shows pure happiness!

 

[onetwothreefour]

mmm, fiesta

 

[Stasis]

*melt*

 

[RareForm]

This was infinitely great! Ah..so i wasn't the first to reply like i said....i still got to it :D

You are suuuuch a good writer.



~Drew

 

[Negative]

Very nice indeed . . . as always.

 

[FestiveCheez]

Very pretty imagery.

 

[Dastrix Slogan]

*applause*

lovely stuff!

 

[sourlemone]

Dont speak
Of concrete and steel mansions
Beaches on azure blue oceans
Sugar coated gumdrops
Glittering on carnival walks

great poem...I love those first five lines especially, very flowing, unstated rhythm about them :D

 

[colicolo]

Simple, yet orgasmicly perfect. You rock!

 

[mariacallas]

****blushes beet red*****

thankyou for the love! lol :D mmmwah

 

[thinctwo]

ill tell you this....
you paint quite an image with the first few lines, which convey more than just the visual. i believe they not only give insight as to how you feel about these images, but also how you think about how others appreciate them
or i can tell you instead of the feelings i perceive just behind those last few lines. either way, i appreciate the images painted and the feelings conveyed.. keep it up!