taste of red

[LadyWidow]

I close my eyes and you kiss me softly
You lips trace over my chin to my neck
You eyes are amazing
My heart close to bursting
You take my hands and hold them tight
They escape the grasp of your to explore you
I run them over your neck to your face
I touch your lips, so cold
I want them again upon my neck
You seem to read my mind
You kiss my neck and my body shivers
I barely feel it...
The sharp peirceing to my neck
I feel like I am on fire, head to toe
I want to scream, but not in pain but in pleasure
It is like I am watching a movie
But it is me in this moment
You kiss my lips and I taste the red...
The red of immortaltiy
Yes I accept
This is my night of transformation
This is my night to show all of you...
That tonight I am no longer the girl you saw
But the women I have become, the women you see

 

[RareForm]

I liked this one alot, i really felt it...

I liked the part about it's like you are watching a movie but it is you in the moment....that's very good writing girl...

thanks for sharing!

 

[cherub]

You can see the change in you as you grow and your writting is growing right along with it.

 

[doofqueen]

That was really cool, took me to a place i've never been before as in i don't feel that side of things but understood how it made you feel

 

[neverwas]

you make me tingle

You take my hands and hold them tight
They escape the grasp of your to explore you
I run them over your neck to your face
I touch your lips, so cold
I want them again upon my neck
You seem to read my mind
You kiss my neck and my body shivers
I barely feel it...

theres only two people in this area of BL who know how to make me tingle and you do it so well.


its good to be so familiar with what you write loved it!