structured breakdown

[Jabberwocky]

I mourn my life
through tears and memory
So that I can lay the past into the ground

burried
at
piece

Fragmented, the way i like
choosing emotion place and time
like co-ordinates (X,Y,Z)
graphing the pain
collectiing my data
structure
its box
fencing me in
A forced Evolution

 

[New]

This strikes me very oddly. It flows while conveying a rather mechanical feeling. It feels like redeeming hardship through a rigid objectification. An odd chord, but powerful nonetheless.