Story Time

[BrightEyesIsMe]

My face begins to grow bright red
The boiling point inside of me is about to blow
Steam in my eyes, I can't see straight
I turn and lose my way
I run into a damn door
I feel like I am in freakin "Alice in wanderland"
Except there is not a goofy ass bunny hopping aroun
There is although an alternative...
He is my "runner"
He controls me...
He runs around fixing my schedule
Programing my t-v
Tuning my radio
AHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!
I am going freaking crazy
I want to bust him in the eye
I want to go my way
But I can't, he has me tied down...
Pain is the biggest giver in his all............
And I take it
Damnit, why do I take it?
Why!?
I am not who I was...
I am not even who I am
Will I ever find the right story to jump in?
Can I ever be restored?!

 

[skjalff]

Haha, BrightEyes ) I knew you love alice in wunderland I Like this poem a lot and can relate to it. Last four lines are awesome, the line: "can i ever be restored?" gave me goosebumps, a very powerful way to end a poem. I often have this feeling of being alien to myself and being terribly misplaced and altered. Very nasty.. and on top of it, it happens so gradually that by the time you realize it is happening you dont remember who you have been or wanted to be. I'm not sure if you have anything like this, just thought id share.

Also, your poetry usually evokes my memories, but now you just played into my hands, this is kinda random and unrelated, but i remembered this bit of lyrics by blind guardian:

Now I fall
I fall into a dark hole
And I can't come out
Do you know if Merlin did exist
Or Frodo wore the ring
Did Corum kill the gods
Or where's the wonderland
Which young Alice had seen
Or was it just a dream
I knew the answers
Now they're lost for me
[...blah blah..]
Will I ever see them back again
Or am I doomed to die by my hand?

I know this has little relevance to the poem's meaning, but hey, i found a way to stick Alice in my reply again. I hope you like these



skjalff

 

[BrightEyesIsMe]

Thank you skjalff

 

[RareForm]

this was quite enjoyable..

 

[cherub]

absolutely amazing piece, you wrote from the way you felt, and it came out in your words. Everyone that reads this, almost goes on the ride with you,,,,, with ending that takes you back into reality. We all are looking for our own story,,, forgetting that we are already in it.