Stain

[bella amor]

He was a dream
An enigma
A figment
A fragment
Of my twisted imagination.
For when I awoke
All that was left
Was a
Stain.


(c) Bella Amor

 

[harraser]

i really really like this a lot. sometimes so much more of an impact can be made with a short piece than ever could with a million rambling stanzas. very much impressed. thank you

-ant

 

[MisterPoetry]

wow, I have to agree with the above statement. Very visual piece here. Glad I had the opportunity to read this, thank you.

 

[alasdairm]

i agree - this is really succint and has a lot of impact.

i like the shape you made it too - people often forget the effect that altering line lengths can have.

alasdair

 

[LilkelPixy]

i looovvve it

 

[absurdhuman]

hey i like this a lot too
i wrote a poem called 'blank' that is somewhat like this one. i believe i've already posted it on BL but i'm not sure...pizzy

 

[bella amor]

Hey, I haven't been around for a while and totally forgot that I posted this. Thank you so very, very much for your comments.
I have literally hundreds of pieces that I just think are too shite to share.
xxBellaxx

 

[neverwas]

i thought i had already replyd to this...

short and sweet. soemtimes the shorter words are the more impacting.

*sighs*