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she wants to get off xanax / gets
prescribed valium / to soften the tiles

black snow / work-shy

she asks something like ‘how many days
longer / must this night go on?’

mattness / queasy ride

‘don’t worry something / will come’
(i actually said / such crap?)

black snow / work-shy

our phone pact / to stay interested
both left waiting / to deserve


Note: 'for how many days longer must this night go on' = Walter Billeter

outtakes | outer
 
The lilting despair seems to be entangled with hope. I don't know how you do it, but you do it well.:D
 
Thanks guys.

where did you come up with that style?
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That's a good question... how long have you got? ;) I know I was reading Paul Hardacre's poetry and a 70s anthology called Applestealers around the time I wrote this, so both may have had some influence in terms of form, and the use of the solidus. I soak up a lot of stuff, but all the same I try to just do my own thing as much as I can.
 
wordy, mcwordy!!! as always, love the style this is presented, suits the mood perfectly.
i love it when something can flow without the intention of it flowing natural.
a broken flow of sorts, if you will.
top show.
 
Thanks lostNfound - and congrats on landing the mod gig. :)

up all night - you just made me blush...
 
I kinda just decided to flip through this forum, so I'm not normally a poetry guy... but how is this supposed to be recited?
 
This is really good... Sounds like someone confessing to something. The parentheses line really works. Like a wholesome conspirative feel, sharing with the reader while she waits to get better.
 
hoopyfrood: I think the best way to answer your question would be to record myself reading the poem and then post a link to an mp3. I don't have the time to do that now, but I'd like to do it. I did read this poem recently at a poetry gig in Melbourne.

Papa: Thanks! :)

izzy66: It was/is an important Australian anthology, although it's been out of print for a long time. I picked up my copy for a couple of bucks at the local trash & treasure market! How did you come across it?
 
I found it at an odd little junk shop just down the street from the university of florida. i've had really good luck finding interesting, usually out of print, books there. I know I couldn't have paid more $2 for it.
 
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