Small poem.......(untitled)

[Sparky]

Just a quick one I came up with.........

Faces in a swirly haze,
happiness from just a gaze,
short, quick, sweet and swift,
hope rekindled from a kiss.

Tomorrow is another day,
were fake emotions cannot play,
dark, blue, cold and lonely,
come together sure but slowly.

 

[JV]

I like the second section (or whatever its called) a lot.

Nice work!

 

[Raz]

I preferred the first verse, but is all good :D

 

[SnowFrog]

Tomorrow is another day,
were fake emotions cannot play,
dark, blue, cold and lonely,
come together sure but slowly.

Very nice!!!

~B

 

[Sparky]

Thank you.......

 

[*Venus*]

Very nice metering.. or whatever they call it.

I liked it all!