She was dead at the time

[PoetessAurora]

He kissed her lips,
Her neck, her breasts
Ran his hands
Down to her waist
Unbuttoned her jeans,
Took them off
He removed
Her pink satin panties
With his teeth
He caressed
Those white thighs
Slide his fingers
Deep inside her
Moving back and forth
Then licked them clean
Before feasting on
Her divine womanhood
Yet all the while
There she lay
A doll so ridged
Silent and waiting
For the time to pass

 

[katmeow]

That's a really impressive piece of writing.

Nice work

 

[Shucklak]

ok i see that it is just that she doesnt want to be touched by this guy, but from the title i thought that she was actually a dead body. that would really be a cool morbid idea for a poem.

 

[Chaotic Action Man]

this is a really powerful piece you've written. like kat said, impressive.

 

[Frosty da snowman]

Very powerfull piece. It brings alot of images to mind, some ertioc, some sterlized, some bluring the lines.

 

[neverwas]

i to thought u were writting bout a dead person qhich kinda mde me goo eewwww...

but great writting none the less

 

[PoetessAurora]

I've got such a responce about people thinking this was about a dead girl... maybe I should write a poem about dead girls or something.

 

[Rollingrrl]

well the title clearly states: she was dead at the time

Its raw and edgy, very good work. And while dead girls aren't typically something I'd read either, I'm strangely interested to see what a poet of your caliber could do with such a topic.

~Shelly~

 

[Altered_Soul9]

I enjoyed reading this. Nice

 

[cherub]

very well put,,,,, definately i am sure the the title caught people's eyes,,,,, but the to read it makes so much sense and understanding.

Been that dead girl before,,,, years ago so i could relate.

 

[PoetessAurora]

I figured most women could relate.

 

[TiberCross]

this turned me on. that's a bad thing isn't it?

 

[E-girl]

damn!

i thought she was dead too when i first opened this, but now i get it.

 

[Frosty da snowman]

i keep coming back to this. good post. so fucking vivid it's like the words live.

 

[Raz]

I didn't think she was dead! :D

Great piece though, nice work Aurora!

 

[PoetessAurora]

Danke

 

[up all night]

So short and simple and yet so powerful. Sign of a great writer IMHO.

 

[faceless_shadow]

powerful words. excellent imagery.

 

[StuffedTiger]

kick ass Aurora!!!