SHATTERED RAVES

[M_D_X_M_A]

You get ready in owr of the night ahead
in your phat candy pants
your kinda funny paranoia shirt
your visor at the ready
candy braclets on your wrists
you best shuffling shoes you own
your ticket in you shin pocket of you phat pants
mobile phone
smokes
party pillz
some gooyie shite
time to go
get to your mates place for pre loading of pillz
and gooyie shite
time is racing
time to rave
you arrive at the door
along with 3 thousand more
you wait in line
pop another pill
bomb some wizz
your though the door
uforia awaits
you stomp so hard you shuffle so good you impress
you notice the girl you have been eyeing all night
looking straight back at you your eyes are locked
she dissapears in the crowd between you and her
later on your feeling down
you head to the chill room to recharge your powedered energy
you get offered some fanta you accept
the girl you noticed walks in
you are in owr
the beauty the grace her smile as she sees you
you blush but try not to show it
she asks to sit next to you
you make room for this godess
the conversation starts
emotions fly could this be romance in the air
she hugs you after sharing a emotional story about your life she shares one to you
after hearing about her wonderful life
you move closer
you kiss
your eyes meet
could this be something more
could this be chance
could this be love at first sight
no she thanks you for listening
she leaves the room
5 minutes pass
as you relise she means something to you you cant explain it
there is not time find this girl
tell her how you feel
you run out of the room
you search the whole rave you cant find her you check out side
nowhere
the sadness
the shame
the emtyness
what to do
the rave goes on the end draws near
you return home
you tell you best friend the adventure you had
only to find out that none of this story accully happened
for the trip you were slipped passed
UNKNOWINGLY
all i am trying to say is please be careful this happened to me and what i precive from this night is completly differant to what accually happened i will never live down the truth of the night as i will pay for my mistake for the rest of my life!
i hope you like what i saw and i hope i worded it well enough for you to understand
RAVE SAFE
[ 22 June 2002: Message edited by: M_D_X_M_A ]

 

[E-girl]

about 3/4 of the way through this i was thinking.... wow, that's an awesome depiction of a lot of nights i've had... in storytale forum, with vivid detail and rememberance...
and then your ending...
and yeah, i've had a few of those nights too.
that's a powerful message.... just goes to show how the brilliance of everything you described in the beginning is sometimes not worth it in the end. and your message.. RAVE SAFE, is a constant reminder we all need.

uforia awaits
i like this. a lot.