Shadow In The Hall

[FestiveCheez]

I am a shadow
In the hall,
A loner
At the ball,
Sitting by the phone
Awaiting your call.
And if you don't
Call soon,
I'll just sit here
Till noon
And think of you
In a gown of maroon.
Pretty people file past me
En route to destinations
Not destined for me.
Some sniff, or laugh,
Then turn away from me.
I am a shadow
In the hall,
Just a sad owl
With a howl.
A shadow
In the hall,
I'm not really here
At all.

 

[Dandy]

I really liked this.

 

[E-girl]

i'm always envious of people who can rhyme.

 

[Dastrix Slogan]

I like how it fades at the end - like the shadow is fading out of sight!

 

[katmeow]

This reminds me a little of the poem in the movie Identity:

Yesterday upon the stair
I met a man who wasn’t there;
He wasn't there again today,
I wish, I wish he'd go away

I liked this piece... short, but very effective & emotive writing!

 

[up all night]

^ That in itself is a really cool poem and coupled with this one it works well.

 

[cherub]

Definately clever!