ripping at the seams

[todeskampf]

a somewhat recent song i wrote... nothing exciting. let me know what you think.
"ripping at the seams"
(verse i)
i found a tear in the latticework
that screams your beauty
my reflection in your crystalline eyes
the breathless gaze of a little boy
still clinging to you
finding solace in these opium skies
(bridge)
oh, look what you've done
see what you've turned me into now
this chemical haze
diluted with hurt
it almost makes me fall right out of love
(chorus)
but almost doesn't count
it doesn't mean a thing
i gave you "forever"
you left it with me
but i'm still in love with you
and ripping at the seams
i'm asking you nicely
get out of my dreams
(verse ii)
you left an ocean of promises
for me to drown in
all the memories lost beneath the waves
and when the salt water pulls me in
dissolving my stitches
i'll just close my eyes and drift away
(bridge)
oh, look what you've done
see what you've turned me into now
this chemical haze
diluted with hurt
it almost makes me fall right out of love
(chorus)
but almost doesn't count
it doesn't mean a thing
i gave you "forever"
you left it with me
but i'm still in love with you
and ripping at the seams
i'm asking you nicely
get out of my dreams
(outro)
i was just a little boy
with charlatan eyes
and you looked like home to me

 

[edgewise]

i can't believe no one replied! i really like it, a bit morrisey/smithsish to me it when i hear it it my head. who are your influences?