Poem: Tears

[ashaman]

Crystalline tears red rimmed jewel,

brown opal to the doorway soul,

those who feel the most pain,

contain the woman's heart of love.

 

[emesaeler]

You really have a way of putting a paragraph's meaning into a single word. This, in my opinion, is beautiful. My red rimmed jewel almost let a Crystalline tear out just reading it.

 

[cherub]

very short,, i think it is great,,,,,

IMHO i would love to read more of it, expanding it more

 

[frostyangel]

^^ ditto, if you can write a short paragraph like this I would like to see what you could do with a whole poem.. *keeps an eye out*

 

[ashaman]

*blushes*
for some reason, i CANNOT write more than 4 lines of poem. i just cannot. i've written a lot of poems within these days, most cynical, and i just CANNOT get pass the 4 line thing. arrgh!

 

[PsychoKitten]

I also have the problem of writing four decent (in my case, fantastic in yours) lines and then struggling to write anything else.

I really liked this.