~Poem of the week~ 3-22-04~beanpoophead~

[cherub]

Sorry about the delay. Accidents happen

but lets not delay any further this week's poet has only been around a few months and those who have read her writting can understand why she is this weeks choice, her flow of words and letting everyone relate to them has been outstanding.

CONGRATS !!!!!!
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beanpoophead
So Over 19-03-2004




Jaded eyes
faded smiles
and lies so bare
drowning in our
own sweet sorrow
carefree days
danging to it all
early hours
so over

me and you
caught in-between
a chaotic fantasy
of hopes and dreams
covered in naked lies
can’t say goodbye
to a nowhere
noplace town
so over

dark days
ahead and behind
cut throat truths
and by product lies
but by and by
we go on
to carry
our own broken crosses
so over

broken hearts
two million miles
apart
except its two blocks
and a million
clcoks
holuding us down
keeping us here
so over

memories of
two months ago
when we were
okay
and we ran with
lines beside us
capturing each
moment, smile
so over

pain sheds
like tears fallen
off our
dirty faces
shameless
disorientation, given
from me to you
and you to them
so over

and it is
so over
all the days
gone
but were left here
and i can’t smile
or hold you here
cos im afraid
it can’t be over

 

[beanpoophead]

awwww you just totally made my day :D

i feel so... special

 

[cherub]

you should, you have done an outstanding job girl,,,,,,,,,keep it up,,,,,,,, we as mods have enjoyed reading your work.

SMILE!!!!!!!

 

[Taliana]

Awesome piece of writing beanpoophead And your only what, 16??!!!

I love the way it kept going back to the same thing of it all being over... But is a bit of a sad ending Having guessed what it might be about...

I look forward to reading more of your work...

 

[beanpoophead]

haha ya im only 16, WELL 17 in a month, but i say im 17 because i might as well be.

 

[katmeow]

Wow, I missed this first time round.

Well done... I really liked this. To say I feel you on this one would be an understatement. Perfectly captured the emotional turmoil of something special ending.

Nice one

 

[up all night]

Fantastic work! I also missed this the first time round. Really extraordinary work... especially from a 16 year old!!

 

[RareForm]

never saw it, but good poem.....i enjoyed it...

 

[Siany]

Wow.. just read it for the first time.. great work!