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~Poem of the week~ 11-24-04~Altered_Soul9~

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We all like people to see eachother push to new levels in writting. Altered_Soul9 has been pushing to new levels in his writting, He has grown over and over in his work. Though he had some tough competion around here, but definately deserves it.

Congrats ! :)
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Altered_Soul9
One stand at a time



I am made of thread
Tightly woven into this meaningless body.
You glance away at my disgusting appearance
Your lies, your deceit feeds this unending flame
It blazes up and licks my back
The fire slowly burns and scorches my body
scarring it forever
I feel I'm made of thread
The twine unravels one strand at a time
Until I am nothing, but a pile of ashes lying dormant in your palm
Just....
Toss me away
Let me float away into oblivion
A place were I will never disturb,
Never bother,
Never annoy anyone
Just let me be free as I braid myself back together
One stand at a time
 
Congrats

I am so proud of you Altered_ Soul9! When i get home we'll have a party or something i agree with the comment that you have grown in your writing and this is a very good poem...see ya when i get home love!~me
 
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Congrats bud! I really love this piece. I didnt get a chance to read this before now, sorry, but what a write! I agree that you have been growing lately..... Hey, how about throwing some of those creative thoughts my way. Mad props my friend.
 
definitely a great write! Its kinda hard for me to single out the very best of your works, but this is up there =D Mad Props!!!



skjalff
 
I remember reading this when you first posted it, it's excellent. I see the ball of fire, "tightly woven" resounds throughout the piece, brilliant imagery.
 
I really appreciation all the comments. This piece is very dear to my heart and this is the greatest compliment i could have ever recieved. Thank You!
 
great piece!! you have change so much in such a short amount of time.... i'm proud my little ass chined one!!!
 
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