please read this

[anhalonium9]

it's a poem called "saw". i need feedback. thanks.


saw
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i saw the best of my
generation
stark raving insane

and the blood and black rain
coming down in pain

and they say it's all the same?



1.22.05

 

[RareForm]

i love this. i need more!

 

[liha]

for shizzle nizzle

 

[on the road]

^^ I LOVE that poem! I have the whole thing written down somewhere.

I liked "saw" but i'd i think i'd love it if there was more

 

[skjalff]

Great stuff again anhalonium, but i concur with the ^^^ : I want MORE

 

[anhalonium9]

i posted a couple more. i think the opening structure was consciosly lifted from ginsberg to make a point. actually, i met allen ginsberg one time in santa monica in cali in the early 90s. more on that if you really want to know.

 

[on the road]

I wanna know. I have a friend that told me he smoked a joint with him when he did a lecture/seminar at his college but my friend is kind of a liar so I dont know if I believe him

 

[LightSeeker]

Ginsberg was a real character, everyone who ever met him has a story about him... I wouldn't doubt the joint tale too much

 

[anhalonium9]

ginsberg

accutally, he invited me back to a little get together where we made small talk, among other niceties. we might have smoked a joint, i dont rem ember that exactly. i walked him out to his car were he kissed me on the lips goodbye. beard and everything. quite strange, but looking back i feel blessed.