Pharmakonymph

[(Wordy)]

Have been working on this for a while. Don't think it's quite there yet, but would be interested to hear some feedback...

PHARMAKONYMPH

lack me
seck me
fick me
kuck me
dock me

I am so dropdead
I am so advertised
I am so rich nation
I am so irretrievable
I am so credit card
I am so hotly contested

You want my perfect smell
You want my perfect artificial
You want my perfect distance
You want my perfect orgasm
You want my perfect photoshopped

I drive a Mercedes Benzodiazepene
I vacuum the aisles of snow
I give a deepthroat finger
I believe the gloss
I trendset the new blackmail

I wanna be on top of your lust
I wanna be a work of ass
I wanna be the Vague cover girl
I wanna be a superstarvation
I wanna be your mantis

See me success
See me undress rehearsal
See me make you stutterfllutter
See me make you choke & divulge
See me fly
See me wasp


Note: in Greek, the word 'pharmakon' can mean both 'poison' and 'remedy'.

(c) Stu Hatton 2005

http://wordyness.blogspot.com/2005/09/pharmakonymph-2005.html

 

[RareForm]

this is brilliant.

 

[katmeow]

Really enjoyed reading this one.

So cutting & witty... the wordplay is great.

Only part I'm not so sure about is the closing stanza - I don't really know how you could change it, but for me, it's not quite as strong as the other sections.

Nice work

 

[(Wordy)]

Thanks for the feedback!

katmeow, I agree about the last stanza. It's not as unpredictable as the others.

 

[Raz]

dude, that was awesome! Very clever use of words..!

..sounded very Marilyn Manson in my head..

 

[frostyangel]

very different than anything I have ever read... different is good!!!

 

[cherub]

very inventive,,, i like something out of the normal stuff good work !