optic-fiber angel

[skjalff]

optic-fiber angel

sunshine passes through you, but you do not see it
you cant see your blood until you're wounded
don't tell the people, they will not understand
they will cut your veins to bask in the brilliance of your light
but as soon as this happens the light will vanish forever
and they will again be stained by blood




skjalff

 

[RareForm]

i liked this but, I would have liked to see a little bit more.

 

[Raz]

^^^Yeah, same....I really like the idea and the phrasing...would like to see this explored more

 

[cherub]

more more more....... hehe sometimes adding more could change the whole aura of the poem,,,, but i think it is fun that it keeps you wanting more

 

[skjalff]

thanks for replies! I actually just dug this one up from my notebook, i wrote in russian a while ago, just decided to translate and post it here. It was some weird mindset that spawned it, I cant really get the feeling back now

peace,
skjalff