Oneshine

[NeWBoRN]

can i stop u for a moment
to let u know my name
u can use it if u want to
or carry on the way we have been
have i seen u somewhere before
or did u see me
does it matter
i don't know
so whats your name?
i wan't to use it
or shall i carry on the way we have been
can u see me cause i can see u
i'm here look
oh u found me
is it too late
no of course not its only 8am
we have hours left
but i'm coming down
we'll sit around
if we can keep each other company through this
we can do anything
we can do anything
but we can never go back to the way we were
why not
because i know your name
but thats how i wanted it
beleive me so did i
then whats wrong
i dont feel so good
want to go a walk
yes
goodbye
wait I didn't catch your name!
This is rather scrappy, it is about a year old and was written while rolling with a bunch of friends after a party, we each wrote something and swapped it so this is the one i have, can anyone help me analyse it???
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[PiscesGirl]

well, of course i can help you analyze it.... it seems like me...especially my first time rollin' ....it's hard to explain though....it's like when your rollin' you want to meet new people it's important to you...but if you don't catch their names you feel empty even after you have came down... you know? well, that's the way i feel anyways....i usually just ask them their zodiac sign...not their name...but sometimes.. and then when i see them at another party i can be like hey i know you your a scorpio or something you know? well, that's just me...anyways back to your poetry.. it's nice to meet people but even better when your rollin....and meeting new people is just like a new experience...especially if you find that person intriging....then it's even more important to know their name... and when your rollin it's easy to find some intriguing... u know? well, that is just my opinion of course...well, i had to just read it again...to get a better concept of what it was about...so, it's nice to just sit back and admire someone while your rollin' but even better to get to know them once you know their name you can't go back to just admiring someone you don't know because you do know them...i don't know it's hard to explain but i'm sure you see what i'm saying...i hope i have helped...love to analyze

 

[NeWBoRN]

Thanx,
Aquarius.........
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