One Sided Affair

[DeirdreScott]

Death, dying, deliverance
ritual religous reverence
of
your youthful
beautiful body
languidly lying
nearly next to mine.

Buth then you
passionately push poignant
amorous advances away
angrily accuse me
of
lying about loving you...

How long will I
conciously continue to carry on
saddening, sickening suicidal
thoughts
because you barely believe me
when I whisper
"I love you..."

 

[RareForm]

alliteration rules! :D this is wonderful, well not the subject matter mind you, but the wording..

 

[yakksoho]

This is absolutely incredible
I love the meter of the words
And the alliteration really shows a bursting over of thought
I can identify really well with the feelings in this poem because of the way you wrote it
Wonderful work

 

[DeirdreScott]

Thank you! :D