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Frosty da snowman

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smoking the abyss at 3:am, flicking starlight ashes into the dust, and twirling angels on a Pin
music in your ears the impossible cry of a newborn pigeon
your only desire the sacrifice of dawn
your heartbeat the only sign of life

tonguing grooved teeth
licking split smooth lips
smelling blood you bite in anticipation

fingers tracing chin
outlining lips
brushing a nose and circling eyes you are aware of your face

the in out motion beneath you
gravel rustle and mini rock slide
you take breath

lens flare at sunrise
arms moving with stiff precision
ordained awareness

sullen prayers engraved in brass
the sheep milling for the wolf
3 seconds for the martyrs
Then you smile into the trigger
 
tonguing grooved teeth

i have this nervous habit.

i was completely blown away by this. i did a preview of it and read the first line. i was hooked from there. i clicked it and was even more surprised when this completely exceeded what i thought it would be. excellent. you make suicide sound so cool.
 
Frosty da snowman said:

sullen prayers engraved in brass
the sheep milling for the wolf
3 seconds for the martyrs
Then you smile into the trigger

Love the flow to this.

Actually, love your work in general, I like the way you put words together.
 
TiberCross said:
i have this nervous habit.

i was completely blown away by this. i did a preview of it and read the first line. i was hooked from there. i clicked it and was even more surprised when this completely exceeded what i thought it would be. excellent. you make suicide sound so cool.


Thank you. Although this wan't ment to be a piece about suicde, I can certinly see where you get that. It's actually about the last few minitues, seconds before a sniper takes his first shot. Well Thats what I was seeing in my head when I wrote it.
 
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