on the last day of your journey

[skjalff]

and then the stars themselves will fall
and turn into flowers
on the last day of your journey
when you will walk through the halls
of infinite tranquility
calm. still. numb
and faceless monoliths of your fears
will bow to you in silent awe

and you will understand
and you will burn
and you will welcome this fire

weightless and immaterial you will continue your journey. and the last minutes of it will spell
infinity in all its glory. And you will see
how futile and pointless the obelisks of your pride have been. how sad and
bleak they look in the light of a thousand suns
you are holding in your hands. All powerful and all-seeing just for a few seconds that are millenia. And then suddenly you remember something, a little something you always new. And then you disappear.

"I AM DOOMED TO DIE"





skjalff

 

[Dastrix Slogan]

Woo! Nice one!

I liked this bit the best:

faceless monoliths of your fears
will bow to you in silent awe

Describes it well!

One critique if I may - perhaps the "monoliths" shouldn't be repeated as the image is powerful enough!

 

[skjalff]

Thanks a lot for the input, Dastrix, i re-read it and the second 'monoliths' is definitely a tautology, so i edited it a little bit. Thanks again.



skjalff

 

[cherub]

Great work, enjoyed reading it.