Not done this in ages...

[shiv]

I've not wrote a poem in aaaages (and I'm a bit pissed) so this might be complete bollocks.

Just a bit of background first, just broken up with my boyfriend (and I mean just) and I just started to write and weirdly I started to feel so much better....I wanted to share it and I thought this is the best best site for it (sorry if it is shite i'll probs delete in the morning when im sober...)

Anti depressants and white wine.
They sell 'em by the box,
take five and you'll feel fine.

Just make sure you take enough,
to knock you out or erase the memory.
Oh fuck there it goes again,
raising from the cemetry.

Better take another two,
make that three, I need to flee.

I'm well above the recomended dose,
I'll slow down now I'm almost close.
Fill the glass, right to the brim,
Be a good girl now drink it down.

Oh! But It's still there,
Whats the harm? I'll take a couple more,
Anything so I won't cry.
Wait I don't feel right, I took too much,
I think I'm about to ...




cant believe im so nervous about posting this

 

[theotherside]

It's good man..............make a great song!

 

[shiv]

eugh even reading this back is making me cringe... to rhymey

 

[shiv]

ah thanks! you psted that fast lol!

 

[theotherside]

eugh even reading this back is making me cringe... to rhymey

That's why it would make a great song. I am a songwriter(try to be) and I am always struggling with the right word. You did very well...no bs

 

[shiv]

aw thanks it made me feel so much better posting it up...dunno why lol

 

[DzNutz]

i liked it...

much lv 4m glasgow!!!

 

[DzNutz]

Maybe I was just a lost soul, trapped in time,
Livin inbetween life, and the cracks were blind,
Even though I had hope, for dreams that never came,
With nothin to gain, all I had was pain!!

Life's false promises, got me nothing flash or sweet,
But if a boy didnt hustle, then a boy didnt eat,
I was lost before I had a chance to find my way,
And I travelled through life, not knowin the time of day!!

 

[shiv]

thanks DZ ive not been ignoring you ive just been melting my brain infront of the telly for a while (sad i know) ...

i love the line 'But if a boy didnt hustle, then a boy didnt eat'

you know ive never been to Scotland...i should go really i love the accent!...and the idea of deep fried mars bars ;P