New Junk Swing (c'mon and dance)

[BlessedAnomaly]

MY
sweatpants romance
never really had a chance
sweating,
breathing,
coughing (wheezing)
white knuckles
and stomach cramps.
wanna dance?
here's the steps:
kiss your arms and spit your stress
on the floor
stamp it out
kill the beast (and make it count)
cotton clouds
float the best
close your eyes,
and scratch your chest
wake up gasping
count to ten
turn around,
begin again



(hope the meter is apparent, I can do spoken word if you want to hear it how I did in my head.)

 

[BlessedAnomaly]

BTW, feel free to give feedback, unabashed praise, or U SUK BRO.

 

[undead]

I like it! It has a really fluent flow to it. Plus it's perfect for my short attention span!

I don't know if I read it the same way you intended it (but I'd imagine they were close), but it sounded good in my head the way I read it.

 

[BlessedAnomaly]

I have a difficult time not sounding like William Shartner or Walken when speaking it out loud lol. Sweatpants romance is named so since when I was using hardcore I always wore sweatpants, nothing else. Needed the comfort, and didn't care enough to look nice.

 

[herbavore]

U DON'T SUCK BRO Seriously, I loved this. The tone was just right. You should do it out loud for us and put it in the audio thread!