Naked Dissertation

[plazma]

Screaming thought awakes hours of darkness
Seed implanted mind gestated aware and alive
Chatter clear voice of reason not mine
Hidden prison bone locked scream for freedom
Small slug lead liberator gunpowder sweet

Lifetime experience learned there is nothing
Flower smelled summer breeze wilted died cold
Tossing turning in midnight hours waited soft sleep
Too long night reason softly collapsed rubble
Pinpoint exact moment realised truth never there

Still wake endless days counting sun's passage
Bleeding thoughts through fingers paper red aeons
Consciousness paroled world seeking absolution in life
Not hate never understanding without purpose or place
Puzzled puzzle piece never fit left the edge of the picture

Curiousity killing cats and people slowly piping up debt
Phoenix forgot to rebuild glows eternally in ashes
Every broken promise amputated and ran out of limbs
Question on question unanswered hourglass never stops
Squeezing time one second consciousness last call

What does the world look like through your eyes?

-plaz out-

 

[Shucklak]

its very raw "naked" if you will, stripped of all but the essentials, and thats what makes it work. original too.

 

[katmeow]

Like Shucklak said, the piece has a very raw quality about it.

It also has a slightly cryptic and disordered feel, yet at the same time it all comes together to paint quite a lyrical picture. Almost like a puzzle... at first glance the pieces don't look like they'll fit, but as a whole, it works.

Quite different to some of your other work of late A!

Thumbs up

Lifetime experience learned there is nothing
Flower smelled summer breeze wilted died cold
Tossing turning in midnight hours waited soft sleep
Too long night reason softly collapsed rubble
Pinpoint exact moment realised truth never there

Liked this part!

 

[Innocuous]

I think you're getting better..