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my friend

Dastrix Slogan

Dastrix Slogan

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my friend,

don't think i don't see
how tired grow your sighs
but how i wish i could show you
your fields through my eyes

with some magic mirror
we will laugh as we cry
i will watch your face glow
in the light of your smile

you'll forget the steel hooks
burdens pierced in your side
and see strength amassed
each night that you cried

you are so much stronger
than you believe you are
you just need to see it
those trees from afar

see the hero who has sheltered
their dreams though the rain
so that cold naked child
can play in sun, once again
 
i really enjoyed this piece. It is really well written and nice to read...

Its good being able to read a poem dedicated to someone else sort of thing in a positive sort of light. Will you ever show it to them?
 
Dastrix Slogan said:
my friend,

don't think i don't see
how tired grow your sighs
but how i wish i could show you
your fields through my eyes

with some magic mirror
we will laugh as we cry
i will watch your face glow
in the light of your smile

you'll forget the steel hooks
burdens pierced in your side
and see strength amassed
each night that you cried

you are so much stronger
than you believe you are
you just need to see it
those trees from afar

see the hero who has sheltered
their dreams though the rain
so that cold naked child
can play in sun, once again
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i feel like everything you wrote in that was directed at me...i want to be happy to :\ ive been battling lately and just reading your love for this person made me cry...im goin to keep a copy of this if thats ok.
 
Very nice! I like how consise this is. I have explored the very theme you are working on here but was never quite satisified with the results. This is very close to what I was looking for.

Good poetry.
 
Wow thanks for the responses, and Nietzche too! :)

*starfalls69* you go right ahead. I have been meaning to write this one for some time now for a friend of mine and thought I would make it more universal. The wierd thing is as I was writing the poem just started to rhyme - I don't usually rhyme my stuff.

I'm sure I will eventually show the person involved the poem, but I like to having the timing right I guess!
 
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