Month 12

[leiphos]

i pull at a spliff, punctuating
my dark room with a red period.
this finale falls somewhere near the day
she left last year. the day i rolled my life

and sparked it to a roach. i lit
and re-lit 11 soggy months and still felt
nothing. i breathed myself black

then passed into the burnt hands
of someone else.

 

[MynameisnotDeja]

i pull at a spliff, punctuating
my dark room with a red period.

Very cool line.

 

[Mehm]

is this about smoking a roach that had to do with a girl who left 1 year ago?

punctuating the room with a red period, i can see it

*merge

 

[leiphos]

Haha, no. The weed stuff is a metaphor. lol.

Oh well, I guess it didn't come across the way I intended. My bad.

 

[(Wordy)]

Don't go changing it...

I can't possibly say that it came across the way you intended, because how will we ever know (there's no single interpretation, no single intention, etc).

But it worked for me.