Mister sad & blue.

[kazza_baby]

Mister Sad and Blue
Why do you look at me the way you do?
I am empty
Yet
Songs are sung and pictures formed.
And into your eyes,
you hold me and I am reborn.

Mister Sad and Blue
Why do you look at me the way you do?
You can let go of
Everything's anything and anyone..
and you'd only be
a couple of miles from the sun.

Would you ever?
Take me higher?
And be, everything I'll ever need?
You're what I,
imagine,
Heaven and earth would be in between.

I'm sorry -
you just made
me smile
too
damn
much.

I'm sorry -
I will step away
now and
watch
you
fly.

I'm sorry -
you didn't have
to
know
what you
were to
me.

(should've kept quiet, darling.
curse your noisy fingers and
whispering teeth)

I'm sorry -
I
didn't know
that
I
was
breaking
you down.

Mister Sad and Blue
Why do you look at me the way you do?
I don't understand how you could want something
as
Fallen as I am.

Mister Sad and Blue
Why do you look at me the way you do?
I have nothing to give
But
Empty dreams you can no longer dream.
And you only make me
More beautiful than I really seem.

p.s. i'd like to breathe you in one last time.
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[(Wordy)]

I like your rhymes, the way you've broken the lines and used italics and bold text. I think these techniques help to make the piece edgy and fresh. Good stuff!

 

[up all night]

I really, really liked this one kazaa. Definitely one of your best and, as Wordy said, the structure is what makes it awesome.

 

[Mary Poppins]

You paint good pictures of heartache kazza