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spinkle

spinkle

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how do you like your name misspelled
i don't know how to answer you
and silence is just as well
i won't sink where the others do
now I need your name dispelled
i don't know where they're sending you
couldn't follow if i wanted to
i don't know why i'm defending you

how do you like your name miss peld
i don't know why i'm asking you
do you see truth in what the others do
react i'll retract what i'm asking you
coming back when the task is through
i'm sorry that i couldn't carry you
obedient and giving due
i'm sorry that i can't care for you

miss peld, I don't

why do you need your name withheld
i know more than the others do
how do you like your name miss peld
i know more than i'm supposed to

miss peld, i don't

how do you like your name miss peld
i don't know how to answer you
so silence is just as well
i won't fail when the others do
now i need your name dispelled
i don't know why i resented you
how do you like your name miss peld
on the last stone i'm presenting you

do you like your name miss peld
do you like your name misspelled
do you like your name miss peld
do you like your name misspelled

spinkle 2005
 
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this is awesome... the best thing i have read today! I love the structure,a nd the way you bring different idea together in this piece.

Love your work! :)
 
Damn! Great flow and clever use of rhyming words. Things just apon the point of being revelead in this, and the emotions seem to change as it ends. Loved it!
 
thanks for the comments =) i've been working on recording it all weekend, but i'm still not satisfied with the results. i'm getting closer, though =)
 
you try and succeed. Great work lil sprinkle :)

I think this shows your talent,, almost sounds though if you were not really trying.. lol
 
i made a bunch of changes =) hope i didn't ruin it for anyone who liked it more before ;)

This is a relatively respectable draft of the song, if anyone wants to hear it.
 
^^ That file is 5.7 MB, just for the interest of those still using a 56k dial-up deal-io... :)

Are you planning to put bass and drums to that track spinkle, or will it just be vocals and guitars?
 
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it's more a learning draft of the song than anything. i'm still fine-tuning the arrangement (which is slightly "wrong" in that version) so i probably won't do anything else with that recording. bass will be involved if/when i do another version, but i lack the drum skillz to do anything more complete than that on my own. =\
 
nice

funny when i read that i though 'hmmm that could be a song' mostly cause of the repitition. i like the recorded version.
 
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