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[LiQuidBlueTraiLz0]

As time goes on.. The heart gets old.. How did my soul get this cold..when i look at what i could have been.. the time just lets it bend..meanin of life unkown come to think are we all just clones? as i look for a ryme that has some form of meanin.. it goes back to me suceeding
Yeah I havent Wrote for somtime now.. just somthing short!..
Open to Critizisim anyone?

 

[Nik137]

I agree, break up the lines short, rhymes usually, other than that ya defintaly didnt lose the skill to write.

 

[NecroTrance]

Concept, mood, emotion...I know it's a short, but why not revise it, extend it...I feel kinda cut short with that one.

 

[LiQuidBlueTraiLz0]

As time goes on..
The heart gets old..
How did my soul get this cold..
when I look at what I could have been..
the time just lets it bend..
meanin of life unkown
come to think are we all just clones?
as I look for a ryme that has some form of meanin..
it goes back to me suceeding
Corrected it. add more soon.