Memories of a broken love

[kleinerkiffer]

Memories

Haunting memories
From a broken love
Lingering in my head
Killing me from the inside
The flashing of pictures
Every now and then
Drive me insane
Pictures of you and me
Pictures of me seeing you for the first time
Pictures of me falling for you at first sight
Pictures of our first kiss
Pictures of us laying in the grass
Feeling nothing but happiness
But then those beautiful memories fly in pieces
Like a snow globe shattering on the ground
Destroying my world
Now I see pictures that fill me with grief
Pictures of you and your new boyfriend
Pictures of you kissing him
Pictures of you loving him
Pictures of you fucking him
What did I do to fuck up our relationship?
Did I love you too much?
Or did you love me too little?
I don’t know
And I never will know
But this question is killing me
Leaving me sleepless at night
And restless at daytime
Only drugs can cure my broken heart for a while
So I take everything I can get a hold of
To forget about us
Taking them till I’m totally wasted
But at the end of a binge the grief returns
Ten times stronger
So I would do anything to forget about you
Forever
I even would rip out my heart with thanks
Only to forget about the love
That is killing me

Comments and suggestions to improve my style of writing are appreciated

 

[xxxyyy]

well, i definitely know where you're coming from, i've been there myself. i'd say your style is a tad melodramatic and you're a bit literal about the point you're trying to make, although you do make it well.

 

[kleinerkiffer]

thanks a lot
da ich noch greenlighter bin kann ich dir nur alle 180 min eine privatnachricht schreiben -.-