Melancholy Baby

[RareForm]

Melancholy baby
Play your song for me
Dancing in the moonlight
With red feathers in her hand
She whispers out to nature
For a one-night stand
Vestal baby fading red
Smothered in a flower bed
Smothered in a flower bed

Melancholy baby
Save yourself for me
Melancholy baby
Take yourself for me

Salvation's son jaded
Find a release for me
Let's dance with gun and flame
To scare the old and new
A pseudo radiant display
To salvage our damned ways
To salvage our damned ways

Melancholy baby
Shake yourself for me
Melancholy baby
Wake yourself for me

Melancholy baby
A spider weaves a web
Across your lonely face
Sealing your eyes shut
Your feelings are misplaced
Never lost in the wrong
In the shade of lie for so long
In the shade of lie for so long

Melancholy baby
Melancholy baby
I leave you to lie alone

 

[BrightEyesIsMe]

Nice. What type o' mood is this?

 

[Pantomime7]

This is a nice write. I really like the way you have a pseudo chorus at the end of every other stanza. I like my friend.

 

[Dastrix Slogan]

Damn! Loved the way this felt!

Vestal baby fading red
Smothered in a flower bed
Smothered in a flower bed

 

[e5th3r]

i love you !

 

[skjalff]

This would be an awesome song Drew! There definitely is something pleasantly disturbing in the lines DS has quoted. One thing: regarding the lyrics thing, if you dont mind, I'd like "break" instead of "shake" in:
<< Shake yourself for me >>
Great piece, has a very intense undertone, love the three rhyming lines in the ends of the stanzas.

peace!
gene

 

[Altered_Soul9]

good write, but an even better song

 

[RareForm]

This would be an awesome song Drew! There definitely is something pleasantly disturbing in the lines DS has quoted. One thing: regarding the lyrics thing, if you dont mind, I'd like "break" instead of "shake" in:
<< Shake yourself for me >>
Great piece, has a very intense undertone, love the three rhyming lines in the ends of the stanzas.

peace!
gene

ahhh you know i don't mind -- i like the suggestion, i'll probably use that for the third chorus.. preesh! :D

Originally posted by Altered_Soul9
good write, but an even better song

indeed. it's subtle yet powerful along with the music, i love it.