Mangled River

[RareForm]

Emerald rivers flowing
through the dark forest
of your soul,
I am captured
by your radiant glow
of waves,
Drenching,
Crashing,
against the walls.

You built this
hardened prison
from all of your guilt,
Sorrow,
for crimes
that were never yours,
yet you were left
to pay the debts.

Still this fortress
slices away
each layer of
innocence,
love,
forbidding any signs
of the existence
I once knew,
leaving nothing behind
but a mangled river
in a broken man.

 

[BrightEyesIsMe]

love this one...it really says so much in so little.

 

[Dandy]

This is fucking amazing.
Hats off to you.

 

[CHiLD-0F-THE-BEAT]

Originally posted by RareForm
Still this fortress
slices away
each layer of
innocence...

^Lovely.
Such a poignant, twisting piece. Very nice.

 

[cherub]

of course very well done, one most can relate to since we all become broken at one time. Just interesting to see when it is put back together.
awesome.

 

[neverwas]

BRILLIANT HUNNY!

 

[RareForm]

thanks for the encouraging replies.

 

[katmeow]

I love the imagery you use in this one. Great work

 

[Altered_Soul9]

Very nice cuz. Loved it!

 

[neverwas]

bit of a bump back up cause i think everyone should read this

 

[Dastrix Slogan]

Oh yes please! Wonderful stuff, even flows like a slow twisting river, very clever!

 

[Dekloren]

Holy shit, how the fuck did I miss this?

This is probably the best thing I have ever read here.

Dude.

Thanks Star for bumping this!!!

 

[froggygirl]

Wow, that was amazing

 

[DG]

Simply lovely.

 

[RareForm]

Thanks for all of the replies....

Thanks Dekloren for thinking this is the best poem on here..lol

JEN, I wish you would atleast try again..

 

[TiberCross]

i've been meaning to reply to this for a while butwords cannot express and you know i enjoy reading all of your work. i love you man.